Thursday, July 17, 2025

1389 - A Separate Peace

 

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The Sunday Whirl presents these twelve words for us to use in a creative writing piece.  

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Poets & Storyteller's prompt is "Survive out of spite".  I merged the two.




A Separate Peace


Care about what others think

and you will always be their prisoner.

- Lao Tzu


Pity.

I pity you.

The fire you carry

Can only consume you.

It shows in your face,

In your fists, in your eyes.

All of it wasted on me.


My goal,

My mission,

Is to laugh at you,

To laugh openly

At the emotions

That are constantly

Brewing, 

Infusing your life,

With an acidic phlegm—

Corroding the vessel

That contains them.


It is not my role 

To reflect them back at you, 

Neither magnified, nor reduced, 

Just ignored.

That is the greatest revenge,

To make and hold a space

Where I am constant and true

To my own values,

To walk my own path.

To not to give you a piece of my mind,

But to create a peace within my mind,

A separate peace.



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11 comments:

  1. To put people's minds at rest, I had no-one specifically in mind when writing this. It was just a writing exercise.

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  2. I like the pace of this poem, slow and controlled, almost through gritted teeth. The ‘acidic phlegm—Corroding the vessel that contains them’ is an effective metaphor, and I love the wordplay in the final tercet.

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  3. This is incredibly raw and powerful, J! Yes, we pay no heed to the "acidic phlegm." ❤️

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  4. AnonymousJuly 18, 2025

    “The wise man draws more advantage from his enemies than the fool from his friends.” - Ben Franklin

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  5. AnonymousJuly 18, 2025

    Nice. Don't let the stupid jerk have a piece of your mind!

    PK

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  6. How very true. I always think that being nasty and evil must take so much more energy, so much more effort, so much conniving and wrestling with demons, than to simply be good and kind and decent. The latter is so much easier only if you've mastered to control your negativity, which is of course very difficult to do...

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  7. Striking interpretation of both prompts!

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  8. I love the certainty of voice in this poem - we all must stand tall and up for ourselves - Jae

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  9. I am glad you told us in comment # 1 this is not autobiographical ... You have delivered a strong message to this fictional person ... forcefully and beautifully!!

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  10. Sara McNultyJuly 26, 2025

    "To make and hold a space

    Where I am constant and true

    To my own values,

    To walk my own path.

    To not to give you a piece of my mind,

    But to create a peace within my mind,

    A separate peace."

    Outstanding and powerful!

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