Sunday Whirl (Wordle #91) presents a list of words
that we must incorporate in a writing piece.
The words this week are:
bends, breaks, burden, diminishing, ditch, drunk,
palace, poetry, room, steps, virtue, wish
No Need for Stars.
In the dark palace of my mind
There is a room for you;
Where, unburdened by our duties,
Our wishes can run true.
Where poetry breaks the confines
And steps where few folk do,
Where inner and outer beauty
Are seen as a virtue.
The diminishing urge for flight
Reveals just who we are—
Lets us ditch a pretence or two
And bend the cage’s bars.
The heavens are a marvellous sight
And sparkle from afar
But ‘til I’ve drunk my fill of you
I’ll have no need for stars.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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Superb write. I would not have thought this inspired by a wordle, a prompt I find very difficult to follow, but here the accent is very definitely on inspired!
ReplyDeleteThat is just absolutely beautiful. How you managed to fit all those words into something so cohesive is amazing-they must have really spoken to you.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely wonderful, this brought tears to my eyes :-) So well done!
ReplyDeleteYou have made the wordle words sing a beautiful song!
ReplyDeleteI do like that we go in so many different directions. You have captured the romantic voice in this wordle...at least in my humble opinion. Thank you for your visit and kind comment to my wordle offering.
ReplyDeletebeautiful! the last stanza sigh-worthy.
ReplyDeleteThat ending is so beautiful!
ReplyDeleteoh! sigh-worthy indeed!!
ReplyDeletexxx
Heartfelt and romantic, beautifully composed.
ReplyDeletexoxoxo ♡
Masterful.
ReplyDeleteLovely, and romantic too.
ReplyDeleteThe first two lines have such impact as a qualified statement, and each stanza bears it up until the last to lines, which are the perfect conclusion.
ReplyDeleteoh, marvelous!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, JC! My heart is beating a little faster as I read that last stanza~!
ReplyDeleteThis is beautifully penned, specially the last stanza ~
ReplyDeleteA tour de force, using so many unchosen words and making sense of them. Will those stars come in handy later?
ReplyDeleteWhat-a-wonder!!!!! Ah, I loveeeee your rhyming! My kind of a poem! And that too written with all those words in mind! Genius!
ReplyDeleteLove this - the notion that love close by competes with the beauty of the sky. Very nice.
ReplyDeletesuch love, a reason I wrote today as well
ReplyDeletehttp://llmcalling.blogspot.co.uk/2013/01/showing-that-you-care.html
This is so beautiful... I especially love the ending...
ReplyDeleteOh how I love your pretense and bars lines! So well coined, the phrases throughout.
ReplyDeletehttp://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/01/17/glow/
Oh this is sooooooooo beautiful and romantic......"but 'til I've drunk my fill of you, I have no need for stars." Sigh.
ReplyDeleteI broke into a big smile here. I am so grateful.
ReplyDeleteNicely done, you should participate in challenges often if this is the result, excellent ending.
ReplyDeleteWordles can be and do such amazing things. What a beautiful love poem you have created, and those final lines are perfect,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/
Wow! Wow! And, Wow! So this is the Wordle you did. Red hot, tender, loving, too. I am amazed...not at you but at the fact that this is a Wordle.:)
ReplyDeleteBreathtakingly beautiful love poem...beautifully rhymed.
ReplyDeletedamn, and you do it with rhymes! cool :-) very nice verse
ReplyDeleteThis builds perfectly! I would never have guessed it to be inspired by a Wordle.
ReplyDeleteLovely poem!
ReplyDeleteThat is just beautiful...no need for more words...you've said it all! :)
ReplyDeleteWell done!
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