Thursday, May 14, 2026

1888 - Coma

 


The Sunday Whirl presented these twelve words for us to use in a creative writing piece.  
wide line self hollow rare track twist eye trance trudge powder empty 



Coma

“Do you think he can hear us?”
Fragments.  Self. Others.
Fragments of life—jumbled.
Scrambling, tumbling.
Like a trance.  But not.
Lost.  Found. Puzzled.
A birthday party.  Mine?
A bush track, somewhere.
I trudge behind.
Bells!  A wedding.  Whose?
A line of guests.  Not me.
A woman?  Mother?
I can smell soap.
“Wash your face, it’s filthy”.
Dancing!  The Twist! 
“Open wide!”
Ugh! Bex Powder!
A house!  Who’s?
Hollow, empty, dusty, dark.
A letter.  A rare treat. 
It vanishes.
A dog, is it mine?  Not sure.
Warm, brown eyes.
I hear voices.  Familiar.
Distant.
“No. Probably not”.

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