Sunday Scribblings had the prompt 'Apology'.
This made me think of the phrase "I am sorry".
Four syllables, mmm, maybe a rondeau?
It carries on a theme from my previous poem.
I Am Sorry
I am sorry that you feel that way
But it is your choice if you stay
Locked in a world of sullen blue;
Where imagined slights just accrue
Until they block the sun’s warm rays
And you then drown in your dismay.
There is nothing more that I can say
And nothing else that I can do.
I am sorry.
But not for my part in your ballet,
Though what that is you will not say.
Nor for however this thing grew.
It is because, as if on cue,
You chose to put on this display,
I am sorry.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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You cannot be in this ballet because you would look terrible in tights.
ReplyDeleteThis is not a surprise to you anyway. People do not all of a sudden become passive aggressive or covert aggressive.It's a way of life for them. You knew all along. Time to face the music...cut and run or squeeze into the cod piece. Nothing is going to change.
True, but they do at least provide creative fodder.
DeleteSounds as if your sign includes the middle finger.
ReplyDeleteI especially like the "do" and "cue" rhyme and the repetition the end the stanzas.
ReplyDeleteReally nice, particularly in conjunction with the earlier poem - thank you.
ReplyDeleteA great study on misery. Not always easy for people to see the brighter side of life though. Not that that makes the rest of us responsible for fixing them.
ReplyDeleteSharp, pointed and rather wise...
ReplyDeletesometimes we hear that which is not said...or read that which is not written
ReplyDeleteAn important phrase which many people find difficult to say... Well done.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece! There is so many people that unfortunately live through misery. No, we can't fix them and can only find the ability to support them if they are willing to try and fix themselves.
ReplyDeleteNicely written, J.C. Been there, done that, 44 years ago.
ReplyDeleteBest thing that ever happened to that episode in my life.
Now I've remarried and we are pretty happy most of the time for our forty plus years.
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I'm.in that.place right.now and now I'm terrified he'll leave because I'm so blue, I pray he'll know that he's the only light I see
ReplyDeleteYou have such an amazing command of form that you make this rondeau seem effortless.
ReplyDeleteSee what your rondeau poem has inspired? I'm reaching for my flute .. all your fault. I remember playing Bach's Rondeau many years ago. I was so young and it was so difficult.
ReplyDeleteGoodness, I know that person. You have said it so well. There are those you cannot pull from the drowning pool of self pity.
ReplyDeletethe dance I do with myself... and the apology too.
ReplyDeleteI am sorry you are upset
ReplyDeleteIs an apology my husband gave me years ago and I flipped out. (He should have stopped at "I'm sorry". ). There are so many nuances to apologizing. Sometimes people like the drama of it all. This poem speaks to me of one who wants just that and doesn't deserve an apology.
I agree with Margaret, I don't think one should apologize for someone else's problem,,,although that apology can be a nicer way of saying,,"suck it up" Only the one saying "I'm sorry" knows for sure :-)
ReplyDeleteYour cadence, rhyme scheme including the surprising do/cue lines, and repetition of "I am sorry" lend power to your message and keep the reader reading.
ReplyDeleteSo basically you're saying, I'm sorry you're being a pouty ass? You say it sooo much better though.
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