dVerse prompts us to write a Villanelle.
Here's one I prepared earlier:
Transports of Delight
Gently they are rocking at evening rest,
Tarped in blue, moored for the night,
These romantic vessels of love finessed.
Coal black ferries to a town possessed;
Venetian transports of delight.
Gently they are rocking at evening rest.
Gondoliers, traditionally dressed
Sing songs of love, of passion bright,
On these romantic vessels of love finessed.
Young women doing what they do best,
Playing Princess to their kneeling knight.
Gently they are rocking at evening rest.
How many a girl has acquiesced
To heartfelt deliveries of a lover’s plight
On these romantic vessels of love finessed?
Sleek confidants to the mating rite —
(Can we, should we, will we...tonight?)
Gently they are rocking at evening rest
These romantic vessels of love finessed.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2012
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haha...how romantic on the gondolas....i think it would be cool...and love how you turn the rocking to the lovers in the night as well...romantic vessels of love finessed, nice line that...well done on the form...
ReplyDeleteYou know, I'm not a huge fan of these form poems, especially the repetition in the villanelle and yet, this one is superb!
ReplyDeleteThe repeated lines are not the 'in your face' lines because they blend into what you are saying so well.
Love the thought of them being princesses and white knights.
Beautiful imagery.
Just beautiful, J Cosmo. Wonderful flow of words; and I can feel and see them rocking through your words.
ReplyDeleteLoved the subtle innuendo and double entendre in this. Cleverly crafted!
ReplyDeleteI loved these romantic ships ... awesome journey !!!
ReplyDeletesmiles...venice is such a romantic place...i've been there once as a teen but didn't ride a gondola...you know...didn't have my knight with me...smiles
ReplyDeleteRomancing on a gondola...very nice. Good to see you getting in touch with your soft feminine side:)
ReplyDeleteHas definite Dylan Thomas flavour in the word sounds and an evocative scene described
ReplyDeleteCause for thought...I shall ponder a while....
ReplyDeleteThis fine poem brought back fond memories of Venice and the gondolas :)
ReplyDeleteVery romantic, classic feel to this, and some quite striking description.
ReplyDeleteGreat wit with a bit of a bite, which could be a love nibble prelude to some. I think you nailed it.
ReplyDeleteThis villanelle paints a serene landscape of the evening, and in that provides a balm for the soul.
ReplyDeleteLove the imagery, very nice. Excellent Villanelle. Thanks
ReplyDeleteVenice, my all time favorite city so far.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully romantic (so perhaps you are a romantic?) and evocative.
Me? Romantic? Ha!
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