In my last post I was pressured to change a reference
to a cold 'spinster's kiss' to a cold 'witch's kiss'.
I felt this may be unfair to the witches.
The Witch’s Kiss
The cat watches dispassionately,
The tail flicks to and fro.
It is, it feels, for deviants,
To merge their faces so.
The Kiss
It promises much more than this;
Enchants
And hold me in her spell.
Transported so affectionately,
The cat can go to Hell.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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Good one!
ReplyDeleteIf a cat can look at a queen, it can assuredly watch a kiss. Guilty conscience, hmm?
ReplyDeleteGuilty about what, hmm?
DeleteCondemning the poor innocent cat to hell, for merely being its curious self.
DeleteMore indifferent than curious. Anyway, what's heaven to a cat is a hell for the mouse.
DeleteThis one flows really well. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I have really taken to the 'Herrick's Stanza' form.
DeleteI really like the form and rhythm here. And in the enchantment of the moment perhaps everything can follow the cat.
ReplyDeleteGood one, JC. The cat will never tell!
ReplyDeleteenchanting....stay under that spell, JC :)
ReplyDeleteI love it! Especially where it leads, how it ends, yet it doesn't end, it goes on, at least in my imagination!
ReplyDeleteI love your not wanting to be unfair to the witches, I had the same thought when I read that comment :-)I never met a witch I didnt love, hee hee. Witty write, kiddo, as always.
ReplyDeleteThe cat should search for a new home.They are very sensitive creatures.
ReplyDeleteI like it, J.C. Cats should stick to looking for mice under Queen's chairs and leave the poets alone. They will soon forget but the poet with a tender heart will remember forever. I do.
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Thank you on behalf of witches. Definitely unfair - we tend to be passionate rather than Puritan. And yes, the cat may keep its own counsel, lol.
ReplyDeleteI've heard the phrase 'as cold as a witch's tit' but that lady seems to have what looks to be delightfully warm ones.
ReplyDeleteLove the form! And I would never assume to change 'spinster' to 'witch'. Never.
ReplyDeleteHilarious!! The cat can go to hell anyway -- I'm a dog person! :-)
ReplyDeleteBut you need to get rid of that pic. I had to read the poem 5 times because I kept going back to the damn picture. The cat would know I am a deviant.
Do you think the pic is accidental?
DeleteLOL, enticing poem, perfect end.
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