Sunday, June 02, 2013

521 : Seen and Unseen


dVerse Poets has the prompt 'Bathroom'.

Seen and unseen

In the steam and falling water,
There’s a body standing bare;
There’s a reflection that displeases—
He ignores the image there.

Showing a vision most unwanted,
He views the mirror as unkind.
It doesn’t match the hero, reflected
In the steam room of his mind.

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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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30 comments:

  1. ha. does it ever? we always kind find fault with what we see when we look at ourselves....and also in comparison to others...

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  2. I like that...what you really see is different from what you think you are ~ Good one ~

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    1. I think someone snuck in the mirrors from Luna Park when I wasn't looking.

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  3. A legend in your own shower recess?

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  4. Ha, the mirror never seems to match the vision...darn it.

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  5. I hear that. I don't know who that guy is!

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  6. One is disguised when one is dressed. That's what one sees and is happy with it. Let's keep it that way! Nicely Cosmo!

    Hank

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  7. Well I wish I had known this sooner...another reason to minimise my visits.

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    1. Interesting comment. So...why do you come at all?

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    2. Freak shows always draw crowds. P.T. Barnum didn't make his money selling tickets to see normal people.

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    3. Oh tsk..not only do I now discover that you do not have the body of an Adonis,but you seemed to have lost your sense of humour as well.I only come here to visit the stunning schwarzenegger look alike Sancho because he does not have his own blog.

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    4. Well, I will encourage him to keep coming!

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    5. If you are going to use me as bait, you must put out some steak, chips and red wine or I wont come.

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    6. Bait for bait. How droll.

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    7. And how are you going to explain away your dumplinesque physique, my little Schwarzenegger?

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  8. Perhaps if you faced away from the mirror...?

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  9. Ouch. My reflected hero is a tad warped as well.

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  10. Wow, that really works as a metaphor...the steam room of his mind. Nice one.

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  11. ha smiles...i like him to think himself as a hero..and if he acts like one, people will see no matter how he looks from the outside..smiles

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    1. Good point. Excellent point, in fact. Sadly, the world at large doesn't always work that way.

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  12. Nice metaphor and the rhyming lines really added to the piece.

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  13. We are our own worse enemies. I think women tend to be a little bit more harsh in judgement when it comes to their own bodies, though.

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  14. The mirror only sees the superficial not the complex nature of what truly sets us apart from animals, our minds!! I enjoyed this !!

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  15. The mirror never sees your true self. Excep of course the mirror of Snowhite's stepmother ;-)

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  16. Enjoyed your poem. True beauty is in the mind :)

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  17. Loved the rhyming verse...I'm sure he is a hero.

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  18. so many of us feel that our naked bodies are visions unwanted!!

    high tech toilet power

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  19. I find the view in the steam covered mirror always fits my image...it's when the steam fades that I see the stranger. nicely written.

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  20. I like what the steam does here! and the brevity of this piece says it clear

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