The Sunday Whirl presented these twelve words for us to use in a creative writing piece.
rifle grass flush steam radiance beetle perfume drifted swaying hypnotic hiss skin
Didn't use steam but it was steamy enough.
Poets and Storyteller's prompt was 'desserts'. Getting them?
The Meeting
“He’s away.
On a business trip.”
On a business trip.”
Their eyes ask,
their eyes answer.
The bodies concur.
They walk to the beach,
a rug on the grass.
She undoes
his shirt,
slowly—
fabric loosening,
intent made clear.
He turns her,
breathes her in—
perfume,
hypnotic,
entrancing.
breathes her in—
perfume,
hypnotic,
entrancing.
The hiss of satin
sliding over skin.
Iridescent fabric,
a green beetle,
falls to the ground.
She turns to face him—
unabashed,
natural radiance.
Skin on skin.
No questions.
Only answers.
Swaying together,
the rhythm of waves
drifting in
from the beach.
Time loosens.
Breath deepens.
A faint flush,
warmth rising,
then quiet.
He kneels up,
looking down at her
lying before him.
Behind him,
nearby,
very close—
the unmistakable sound
of a rifle
being cocked.
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Thank goodness you lived to tell the tale... Good one !
ReplyDeleteOMG JC! Was that autobiographical!
DeleteOh my!! I expected quite a different ending!! Great write, tantalizing in the best way.
ReplyDeleteWell, the ending didn't end here. It's up to us. I had a similar poem, on a Hawaiian beach a while back. https://jimmiehov6.blogspot.com/2025/12/evening-on-beach.html?m=1
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it went very smoothly all the way, but then... that sound
ReplyDeleteSteamy. Great twist at the end. Well done!
ReplyDeleteA brilliant end to complete your sensual descriptions - Jae
ReplyDeleteYes, it is steamy enough.
ReplyDeletethe unmistakable sound
ReplyDeleteof a rifle
being cocked.
The beach may be quiet but be aware of someone lurking behind. Would like to know what follows after, Jim! What a mystery!
Hank
Hank
beg your pardon, Cosmo! Great write!
ReplyDeleteHeck of a twist. Just desserts indeed!
ReplyDeleteWow! a steamy write with a twisted ending. Excellent, J!
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