Sunday, July 17, 2011

CCXXXV - Captivated

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Sunday Scribblings had a topic 'Captivate'.


Captivated

He loved her with a passion
That few could understand.
Such love is out of fashion,
It’s often even banned.

He loved her sparkling eyes,
He loved the way she sits,
He loved her inner thighs
And her pretty pinkish bits.

Her skin was smooth as plaster,
Her hair was golden-tressed,
He never thought to ask her
If he could watch as she undressed.

Did she know she had this beau?
That’s far from being certain
But the heartless little so-and-so
Turned and pulled the curtain.

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© 2011 J Cosmo Newbery

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25 comments:

  1. I love it dear J Cosmo!

    xoxoxo ♡

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  2. Ah! So YOU were that peeping Tom!

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  3. I liked this; the rhythm swung along well, and your punch-line very amusing.

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  4. This is so hot that it's well done!

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  5. Loved his piece. An utter delight. (Can I suggest you change the 'He' to 'Her' in the third verse?)

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  6. Oldegg: Good skills. Done.

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  7. Great ending.
    Shame on you for taking a look! ;-)

    Nice one!

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  8. AnonymousJuly 17, 2011

    Loved this twist in the tale! Very amusing.

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  9. This gave me a much needed chuckle this morning. VERY clever.

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  10. Bit of a curtain watcher..fumbling voyeur..the end line was like a snap of a turn..absolutely made me :) Jae

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  11. Great piece of poetry. Loved it :-)

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  12. bit of a mean tease, eh?

    p.s. JCN on facebook???! oh my.

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  13. Sensual, humorous, and passionate!! Who could ask for more!! Well done, loved it!!

    Hugs Giggles

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  14. So much for all his lurkin' ..

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  15. Thanks for making me laugh! Superbe!

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  16. Clever, passionate and perfect for "captivate"! Wonderful :)

    Aeria

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  17. or the alternate title:

    Where'd You Get Those Peepers?

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  18. So glad you dropped by.....I had lost all my quick links, well most of them. Your poem made me smile. :)

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  19. Quintessential J. Cosmo Newbery!! Love it!

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  20. AnonymousJuly 28, 2011

    tense, sweet.

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  21. AnonymousJuly 28, 2011

    short story slam week 6 invites your contribution, a poem or prose would work too.

    hope to see you share.

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  22. So cleverly done. You managed to make something creepy seem charming. :)

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  23. I LOve your poetry :)

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  24. Wierdo WalloperAugust 11, 2011

    Voyeurism becomes a pervy poet!

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