Friday, March 28, 2025

1359 - The Edge of Belonging


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The Sunday Whirl presents twelve words for us to use in a creative writing piece.  

This week's words are:

sorrow, dip, embers, moment, chain, wild, silver, free, trance, glimmer, faint, trim



The Edge of Belonging


I do know that I have always been one of life's observers, 

always standing slightly on the outside, watching.  

— Jane Green


Like embers floating high

Above and away from the flames.

Like silver glitter swirling in a globe.

The innocent bystander.

The dispassionate observer

Watching, trance like, from above,

The parade, the charade, of life around him.


People talking, engaging, interacting,

Swirl around him, unknowing, indifferent

To his underlying sorrow.

And yet, in fairness, it is not of their doing.

He chooses to be with them, but not in them.

Occasionally, with effort, he pushes himself

To dip into the wild, frightening maelstrom

That swirls around, engulfing him.

But he cannot stay, he doesn’t fit in.


They are free, he too is free, but separately so.

They are not of his tribe, not of his kin.

With them he feels chained, restrained,

More like a suspension than a solution,

In life but not of it.  Swirling.  Swirling.

A commensal diner at the table of life.


Now and then there is a moment,

A glimmer of acceptance, of dissolving 

Into the rapidly flowing tide of life,

A brief contact with a kindred soul.

Entering more a side eddy than the full current,

Life briefly swirls and tumbles then calms.

The parade moves on, leaving him beached.

Only to wonder why? Only to trim his sails,

To reduce expectations, to retreat

To the faint but safe region:

The edge of belonging.


 

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18 comments:

  1. The beating heart of your writing is that tension between longing and acceptance. There’s so much tenderness in that struggle — to want connection, to dip into it, to taste it — and yet to know, deep down, that it may not hold you, or that you may not be able to hold it. Not fully. Not for long. So we learn to live on the edge of belonging, where it’s safe, where we won’t be swallowed whole. It’s lonely there, but familiar. Almost peaceful.
    Your poem lives in that quiet place we rarely speak of, but so many of us know... Thank you

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    1. Your reviews always seem much more elegant and intelligent that my original post! Thank you.

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    2. Maybe it’s just creative trust

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  2. mainpoint's eloquent comment summed my feelings up so well. Thank you both.

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    1. Thank you… Some poems don’t try to explain anything - they just sit beside us and let us feel what we didn’t know how to name. This one did that for me. And I think that’s the rarest kind of gift.

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  3. Such a striking and evocative phrase, 'the edge of belonging'.

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    1. The actual initiating phrase was "a suspension rather than a solution", said to me by the leader of a group I went away with but felt remote to.

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  4. Alone amidst the crowds, isolated and protected by a thick carapace, longing for, but unable to seek acceptance. And it all happens in April!

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  5. Isolation beautifully expressed. Give thanks you're not one of the herd. You're missing out on nothing. A commensal diner at the table of life. Great line. A poetry thief will steal this one:) Happy Birthday to you!

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  6. Take it, use it, polish it, make it glint in the sunlight.

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  7. The bit about the parade moving on, I totally feel that. No matter what happens, it just goes on. Very nice poem.

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  8. Your poem surely encourages one to remain positive in the ace of adversity?

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  9. the edge of belonging is a really powerful statement to end with

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