Thursday, September 25, 2025

1850 - Outside—Inside—My Side—Your Side

 

Outside—Inside—My Side—Your Side


Bird calls, unfamiliar to me—
Red-browed finches? Maybe.
Magpies, not chortling, clearing throats.
Crows, rooks—harsh, abrasive.
A passing commuter train,
Full of people going somewhere.
A boy waves from the overpass;
The train blows its whistle—a simple kindness.
Cars pass. People on urgent missions.

Spring is alive in the garden:
Wattles burst yellow, finches forage.
A pink-blossomed tree—a peach, I’m told.
Sunlight pours into the room.
I sit, pillow supported, coffee in hand,
Watching, listening, marvelling.
Grieg plays—Peer Gynt, Morning.

A faint smell of wash and wear paint,
New carpets, too.
Over me, a blue mohair blanket—
Cobalt and ultramarine—left just for me.
Onkaparinga, a name from the past.
"Empress Mohair", left by a Queen.
I feel warm, cocooned.
I reach out to your side of the bed—

It’s cold.


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15 comments:

  1. A touching poem of strangeness, newness and offered comfort. Very well expressed. Nice to have Australian references oc birds and blankets while in Osterport.

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  2. OMG, after so much imagery of sensual pleasure and physical comfort, that final line (for all its baldness and restraint) is a gut-punch.

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  3. This is marvellous, in both its scene setting and the gut punch at the end. Well done.

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  4. What a stark and painful last line all the more effective for the wonderful images you described before - Jae

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  5. I love the use of colour in this poem, and all the birds – wonderful! – especially the ‘magpies, not chortling, clearing throats’, and the hint of Grieg’s ‘Peer Gynt’. A poem that appeals to the senses, with an interesting ending that leaves me with questions.

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  6. Woh - I love that twist at the end! Just when I was lulled into that cocoon! 🙂

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  7. A lot imagery in this one! The patchwork quilt gives an illusion of warmth until you get to the last line. Then bam...the coldness lingers.

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  8. Cosmo, I was so drawn into the scene - love the birds! The comfort, the views out the window, the WONDERFUL mohair blanket (I'm jealous!)........and then that last line. Heartbreaking. So lovely to see you pop up on my site, Cosmo. Made my day. Hope you are well .

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  9. I love the spring and colors but that ending line was just cold and sharp.

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  10. Onkaparinga...now that rings a distant bell. ..about the same era as chenille dressing gowns...Pleased to hear you are so happy feeling warm and cocooned I guess the Queen has to get up to go to work to keep the King in the luxury he has become accustomed to ( that's my interpretation anyway)

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  11. Oh No way ! No worries, she'll return soon...laden with gifts of new mohair rugs and signed copies of the Peer Gynt Suite. Absence makes the heart grow fonder

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  12. The harshness of the end made me really stunned...

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