Three Word Wednesday requires participants
to use the three words of the week in a composition.
The words this week were: Haphazard, labored, noxious.
Alien Battleground
Dawn.
Beyond the drapes,
The morning chorus
Of the worm tormentors.
Magpies chortle,
Impatiently.
Doves,
Dumb as bricks,
Coo-coo,
Mindlessly.
Inside,
Beneath the covers,
There is slow acceptance
Of the truth:
Dawn.
But all is not well:
Breathing is labored.
Thought patterns,
Are irregular,
Haphazard.
Something thick,
Slimey,
Noxious,
Has invaded the airways.
Alien forces battle for dominance:
Slime vs pharmacy.
I wait to see who wins.
So do the birds.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2015
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All too familiar. I hope that the slime can be dispelled. Quickly.
ReplyDeleteAnd I think that bricks are more alert than doves.
ouch! who will win?...
ReplyDeleteget well soon! it's a war out there - aliens always trying to get in and those worm tormentors ( I shall always think of this line now when I hear the dawn) Marvellous the way the poem went from outside to in, from the relatively harmless to the more serious.
ReplyDeleteWow..fantastic take on the prompt..effortless!
ReplyDeletePowerful write!!
ReplyDeleteI'd say pharmacy - but then I'd say that whatever the dawn dilemma ;)
ReplyDeletemade me smile, so many stories we can write, what may seem like children stories, hide real meaning behind them.
ReplyDeleteLet's hope you are up and about soon like a spring chicken.
ReplyDeleteOh, yuck, that awful feeling at the start of a cold!
ReplyDeleteNever thought cold can be expressed in such beautiful words :)
ReplyDeleteWhat a comparison of the two battlefields--with a little "pathetic fallacy" thrown in for good measure: The birds' dawn food hunt need not be mindless because illness renders us so--and yet, truly, instinct would take over humans, too, were not the pharmacy involved. I like that the battle/paradox is not resolved by poem's end. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteOy! Are you under the weather? You have described the invasion so clearly it makes me uncomfortable, LOL. A sign of skillful writing! Get well soon.
ReplyDeleteThere obviously are lots of conflicts in contending elements vying for the crumbs. The stronger ones get there first!
ReplyDeleteHank
Yup! ...i got the picture and you are right :-)
ReplyDeleteZQ
Sometimes we are brought to another dimension when we are sick. Hope you feel better soon
ReplyDeleteThe good guy will win of course. But it may take a little time. Nice that you can write with such good humor though you don't feel well.
ReplyDeleteA cold is a perfect reason to stay in bed if you can.
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