Sunday Whirl (Wordle #139) presents a list of words
that we must incorporate in a writing piece.
The words this week are:
fix, apart, snatch, cover, pair, angel
waves, simple, box, clay, lies, moon
The Caretaker
Beneath the moon,
Beneath the clay,
In a simple box,
Lies a simple man.
He was a believer,
This simple man.
He believed
That a celestial father,
Attended by a pair or so
Of luminous angels,
Of luminous angels,
Would never, ever
Permit our world,
His world,
Genesis one one,
To fall apart,
To come undone,
No matter
How bad it got,
How hot it got.
It would never happen.
He believed that
No matter
How many storms
And crashing waves
And searing droughts
And floods,
And fires,
And blizzards
Were visited upon us
To cover our world,
With pain,
And suffering
And death,
All within our control,
But beyond our will,
That his diety,
His God,
Would protect him,
His God,
Would protect him,
That all would be well.
He believed that
God,
God,
His God,
Would fix it all,
Would snatch him,
A true believer,
But a negligent caretaker,
From the unfortunate mess
That he had made
To a heaven
Built of his desiring.
Never seeing that
He had made a hell
From the one heaven that
He would ever be given,
This simple man,
In a simple box,
Beneath the clay,
Beneath the moon.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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The repetition at the end is effective. I enjoyed your simple man. Cheers!
ReplyDeleteWhat I don't understand is why we let these simple men get to positions of power. For heaven's sake, we even elect some of them.
ReplyDeleteOuch.
ReplyDeleteIt only hurts if you care.
DeleteI do not know which religion this simple man followed where he thought that there would be no consequences of destructive actions and God would fix all. This is not a precept of any of the four main religions Christianity Judaism Islam or Hinduism. He must belong to the religion of the gum nut fairy!
ReplyDeleteBelonging to a religion and following it are not the same thing for many people. Does Mr Abbott's refugee policy follow the teachings of Christ, for example?
DeleteI'm interested in the Religion of the Gum Nut Fairy. Where might I find out more about it, please? ;)
DeleteA Wordle Whiff of Christmas
Start your own.
DeleteSadly what you say is the case . Hypocrisy is rife amongst religious followers. This should not reflect on the religion itself. Mr Abbot is not a representative of the Catholic Church.He is a follower.Incidentally the Catholic church is the only Christian Church that the destruction of the environment a grave sin. Mr Abbot is the leader of a secular political party and is bound by their policy even if it is conflicting with his personal belief system. If matters of conflict occurs between his belief system and his secular party he has to choose. Christians are not perfect people but if you declare yourself to be a Christian one expects that you would follow the Christian code in matters of compassion and justice. After all western civilization is based originally on Christian ethics which are framed in the laws. If you are an atheist you are only bound by the law of the land and not much else. Personal ethics are personal choices for personal reasons or no reason at all..Ideally all politicians should be atheists because right and wrong are purely subjective and not fixed as an absolute. I think most politicians are closet atheists anyway even though they claim to be religious followers.
ReplyDeleteGranted. in my circumstances I can only meet religious followers and do not meet with the pure church. I must therefore base my impressions on these meetings and they are invariably patchy. No-one is perfect (No Sancho, not even you.). But I have met and also read articles by folk who seem to truely believe that God will save them from climatic disaster. Or that is the necessary condition for the appocalypse. Now they are the people who worry me.
DeleteThere are wonderful religious people who you will never meet unless you seek them out because they keep a low profile and devote their lives to the orphans the sick and the suffering and nobody knows or cares who they are....they are not the Princes of the Church.These are the true saints and a lot of them are nuns working in the third world. Your time would be better spent on reading CSLewis Aquinas or Augustine if you want to know about the real Church instead of cult crackpots going on about the Apocalypse. .Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrr! I knew I should not have responded to this post:) Although we have not crossed swords for yonks now . We should save it until after Christmas. I would like to remain calm during advent:)x
DeletePeace.
DeleteWhy do the religious always assume that atheist have no moral or ethical values?
Deletei agree, the repetition in the last lines is very effective. great imagery and strong thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThis is an exquisite "poem" although perhaps it carries within it, as do all great poems, larger issues, it rings purely with the misguided life of the simple man, its words resonate throughout this morning in the chambers of my soul - where the echoes of compassion for all - even the most vicious and/or misguided among us are ultimately simple souls that too often miss the point of their lives. I loved this poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks DrP. Part of it flowed from working with people who cannot 'see' climate change. What is it that blinkers some people against what is so bleeding obvious to the 97%? If they went to 100 doctors with a complaint and 97 said tehy had cancer and should take action and 3% said 'nah, you're fine', whould would they believe?
DeleteSorry. Irritation ruined my spelling. *sigh*
DeleteYes, I liked it so much! This simple man in his simple box....
ReplyDeleteVery clever, and the repetition works exceedingly well.
ReplyDeleteWe all have choices, to make heaven or hell of our life ~
ReplyDeleteI don't mind people making that choice if they are the only ones affected.
DeleteThe repetition in your first and last stanzas is very effective; an ode to all the unassuming, uncomplicated, SIMPLE folk everywhere.
ReplyDeleteThe truth is they are not just simple people, they are often scared simple people.
DeleteYes, we create our world by our words and beliefs. It is so simple...
ReplyDeleteA fine read and we all know this simple man...the world is filled with those like him.
ReplyDeleteI guess if you can screw over your own child..you can screw over anybody..wherever you rank on the celestial scale..
ReplyDeleteAs an atheist, I understand where you are coming from in that comment but I still come back to the core issue - we must fix this planet ourselves, we cannot 'wait for Daddy to come home from work' to fix it.
DeleteTrue of many things..it all lies in our hands...do excuse my flippancy..
Deletethe poem is profound with simple words .........
ReplyDeleteI loved this. I know "simple men" like this and perhaps they have an easier time of it on this earth than any of us. Loved this poem, Cosmo, love the simplicity of it. It reads well.
ReplyDeleteThe ones that both scare and infuriate me are the ones who say "What should I care about the planet? I will be dead by the time it is really bad."
Deletetruth and power in this poem... to ignore or dismiss is just as bad as the deed...
ReplyDeleteIt truly amazes be what you can do with these prompts.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the premise of this poem, btw.
Thank you, they do present a challenge at times. Well, most times, actually, but sometimes they just slot into place as if they were meant to be. Getting 'flow' is teh most difficult bit.
DeleteMr. Abbott seemed to have got a lot of air time in the comments. I like to think a good precept is if you have been given life, don't make things worse while you are here.
ReplyDeletebeautiful.
ReplyDeleteoops....I meant to add that I believe that we are all responsible for the hells or heavens we make for ourselves and for those around us...right here, right now. I do not put much stock in anything else.
ReplyDeleteI loved this very much. It's not the sort of thing I think I could write, I'd be too scared to offend. Maybe I should get some courage and go there.
ReplyDeleteThink of it as cheap therapy.
DeleteI don't believe your "simple" man is all that simple. I think he is scared shitless and he should be.
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Yes. At the very lesat paralysed.
DeleteHi J Cosmo, this is a terrific and interesting piece of writing - unique and powerful vision. Enjoyed it very much... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteWell written. Bravo with the rhythm and the pace of the declaration and the return back to thinking.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Cos, my cup of tea, thanks. The most self-assured people on our planet are often the ones trashing it because... hey, Jesus is coming in THEIR lifetime, so why bother about the environment?
ReplyDeleteOr in another sense, "I'm saved and the pastor assured me I'm going to heaven no matter what," then goes home and beats his wife, you know?
The bookending of the first and last stanzas hit it home. Brill. Amy
A moving poem.
ReplyDeleteI do not words to express.......
ReplyDeleteiced desire
Ummm ... I'm with Rallentanda on this one. If you've read Genesis and the other first 5 books of the bible, then you've not grasped their poetic meaning. It's all slightly more nuanced than careless man.
ReplyDeleteHave a Happy Christmas Cosmo.
A missionary and a mercenary, how droll.
DeleteThis was not a religious discussion as such but pointing a finger of scorn at the people who use any position of faith (whatever it may be) as a bulwark against a tide of facts. Religion was secondary to the fact that people are using a faith in something to abrogate their responsibility to care for the planet.
I have read more of the bible that most. :-)
Come now, Cosmo. I stopped adopting the missionary position a long time ago and rarely charge for my services :o)
DeleteI do agree with you is that there is a significant 'faith' system causing harm to the planet - the protestant ethic in combination with unrestrained capitalism. It's resulted in exploitation, greed and mass consumption, seeing them as virtues.
Thank you.
DeleteThat's the 'P' word out of the way. Then there's the 'C' word to reflect upon. There's a whole body of Catholic social teaching in direct contradiction to the protestant (more accurately Calvinist) approach. There's more than one way to read the bible.
DeleteAgreed...Pope Benedict declared that climate change was one of the great dangers for the future of humanity.. The environmentally conscious Cs resent being tossed in with the Ps:)
DeleteWhat rubbish. Are you paying attention at the back of the class? The topic was the environment and people who use faith as a reason to trash the joint. Why are you afraid to stick to the topic? Why the need to head off on a tangent? Mmmm?
DeleteAnyway…are you telling me all Catholics are perfect and all Protestants are not? Religious profiling. How very charitable of you. Two words: Tony Abbott. Is he Catholic? Is he environmentaally conscious? Pfffft!
Mind you, if somone has to be incensed, it probably is naturally the role for a Catholic.
I am being of the humble opinion that the Hindus are being well placed to be equally incensed. And with a variety of fragrances that are being more disparately so dispersed, isn't it?
DeleteYour unhinged irrational outburst bears no relevance to my comment whatsoever. Before you embark on another religious bashing session you should check your facts first because I am fairly certain that you did not know it is mandatory for Catholics to protect and respect the environment. It is not binding in doctrine in any of the other Christian denominations. Obviously this must come as disappointing news because you will not be able to use the environmental issue in Catholic bashing workouts..but hey take heart....the Church provides a plethora of shit you can hurl at it...just not the environmental one...Tsk!
DeleteIrrational outbursts from me? Reread your comments for a textbook example. I bow to your superior skills. I have no idea why you want to pick a fight over Catholicism as you brought it up, not me. My post mention nothing of the Catholic Church. If you want to pick a fight, and you seem to be itching mightily for one, I am sure there are a multitude of sites open to you but if you can't stay of topic here, kindly go elsewhere.
DeleteSince when did you stay on topic?
DeleteAh, shut up.
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Delete" Does Mr Abbot's refugee policy follow the teachings of Christ?"
You asked me this question 4 days ago. I would say you were itching for a fight. I answered it.
I wont be back.
Who was that?
DeleteDunno.
DeleteProverbs 25:17
DeleteGreat poem, Cosmo :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sue. I learnt a lot from this one.
DeleteI'll bet you did! :)
DeleteYou do stir things up don't you…
ReplyDeleteThere's no sun thing as climate change that we're responsible for, didn't you know? It's all part of the "plan." You don't believe in the plan, though. Me neither...