Sunday, December 02, 2012

CDXIII - Missing You



dVerse has the prompt ‘Missing You’.


Missing You

I’m missing you.

Your loving eyes
Your hair, 
Your smell. 

My pleasure lies
In that you are not far away

And, in your absence, 
Will loyally stay,
Biding my time 
And improvise.

To follow you 
Would be unwise,
Your return 
Will be my sole reprise

All that goes to explain 
The way I’m missing you.

In your absence 
A small part dies 
And black clouds 
Cover up the skies

The world becomes 
A sodden grey

Which only adds to my dismay
That false bravado can’t disguise

I'm missing you.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2012
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21 comments:

  1. I'm sure whoever you're missing is missing you too :)

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  2. aww this is lovely..you really made his thoughts visible...dogs are the most loyal creatures...wonderfully penned...and look at those eyes...

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  3. What a lovely poem - I wonder if this is what dogs feel.

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  4. Awww, such a sweet and beautiful poem for someone you are missing.
    The picture of dog is so appropriate too, faithful, patiently waiting, those big eyes just waiting to see the face of its owner.
    xoxoxo ♡

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  5. smiles....there is a really nice rhythm to this...and all the color leaving or just not the same with them gone....yeah i feel that...and love me some pups...

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  6. Very touching! I am not sure if it is written about a dog or a person, but it doesn't matter. The sentiments could be the same. I could see this poem as a song. I hear a guitar strumming.

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  7. The world does become grey when we miss the ones we love. relate to this completely. Very touching poem- thank you for sharing - stu mcp

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  8. Tough guys with false bravado miss our pets (but damn it man, don't publish it!)

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  9. Beautiful... the last stanzas are more beautiful!

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  10. missing you, perfectly conveyed

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  11. Beautifully captured...specially this part:

    In your absence
    A small part dies
    And black clouds
    Cover up the skies


    Happy week ~

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  12. I knew you would resurface eventually...lol. And how lovely it is to see that vulnerable side come out in this one.

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  13. The message is keen and clear. The rhyme scheme, just right. Strong write to which anyone connected to a loving creature will relate.

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  14. Oh that photo ! those eyes! Wonderful poem about missing someone. You nailed it.

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  15. If someone could find the antidote for 'missing you', he would be a billionaire.

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  16. Lovely, lovely, lovely. Really lovely.

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  17. Cos, anyone who truly looks into the eyes of a dog cannot say they don't have souls. And when you lose any soul in your life, you do lose, as Janis sang, "another little piece of my heart." It's clear you are writing from experience, and as a former dog owner who longs for a lapful of unconditional love someday, I can only say, I feel for you. Peace, Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/12/04/missing-charlotte/

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