dVerse Poets has the prompt 'Bathroom'.
Seen and unseen
In the steam and falling water,
There’s a body standing bare;
There’s a reflection that displeases—
He ignores the image there.
Showing a vision most unwanted,
He views the mirror as unkind.
It doesn’t match the hero, reflected
In the steam room of his mind.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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ha. does it ever? we always kind find fault with what we see when we look at ourselves....and also in comparison to others...
ReplyDeleteI like that...what you really see is different from what you think you are ~ Good one ~
ReplyDeleteI think someone snuck in the mirrors from Luna Park when I wasn't looking.
DeleteA legend in your own shower recess?
ReplyDeleteAren't we all?
DeleteHa, the mirror never seems to match the vision...darn it.
ReplyDeleteI hear that. I don't know who that guy is!
ReplyDeleteOne is disguised when one is dressed. That's what one sees and is happy with it. Let's keep it that way! Nicely Cosmo!
ReplyDeleteHank
Well I wish I had known this sooner...another reason to minimise my visits.
ReplyDeleteInteresting comment. So...why do you come at all?
DeleteFreak shows always draw crowds. P.T. Barnum didn't make his money selling tickets to see normal people.
DeleteOh tsk..not only do I now discover that you do not have the body of an Adonis,but you seemed to have lost your sense of humour as well.I only come here to visit the stunning schwarzenegger look alike Sancho because he does not have his own blog.
DeleteWell, I will encourage him to keep coming!
DeleteIf you are going to use me as bait, you must put out some steak, chips and red wine or I wont come.
DeleteBait for bait. How droll.
DeleteAnd how are you going to explain away your dumplinesque physique, my little Schwarzenegger?
DeletePerhaps if you faced away from the mirror...?
ReplyDeleteOuch. My reflected hero is a tad warped as well.
ReplyDeleteWow, that really works as a metaphor...the steam room of his mind. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteha smiles...i like him to think himself as a hero..and if he acts like one, people will see no matter how he looks from the outside..smiles
ReplyDeleteGood point. Excellent point, in fact. Sadly, the world at large doesn't always work that way.
DeleteNice metaphor and the rhyming lines really added to the piece.
ReplyDeleteWe are our own worse enemies. I think women tend to be a little bit more harsh in judgement when it comes to their own bodies, though.
ReplyDeleteThe mirror only sees the superficial not the complex nature of what truly sets us apart from animals, our minds!! I enjoyed this !!
ReplyDeleteThe mirror never sees your true self. Excep of course the mirror of Snowhite's stepmother ;-)
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your poem. True beauty is in the mind :)
ReplyDeleteLoved the rhyming verse...I'm sure he is a hero.
ReplyDeleteso many of us feel that our naked bodies are visions unwanted!!
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I find the view in the steam covered mirror always fits my image...it's when the steam fades that I see the stranger. nicely written.
ReplyDeleteI like what the steam does here! and the brevity of this piece says it clear
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