There seems to be a nocturne theme in the blogosphere at present.
Imaginary Garden with Real Toads asks us to write a Nocturna.
(9 lines, decasyllabic, aba cbc dbd.)
Intermission
Bells, vespers for the closing of the day
Herald the coming of a time of rest
And present a chance to clean the slate.
An important lesson that should be drawn:
Our problems, too, traverse the night refreshed
To reappear with the coming of the dawn.
Through such loose ends, countless sheep are numbered;
Far better if the issues are addressed
To then start the new day, unencumbered.
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© J Cosmo Newbery 2013
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Best to start the day encumbered, after a good rest ~ You got the rhyming pattern correctly & linked rhyme words - rest, refreshed & addressed.
ReplyDeleteThanks for linking up with Real Toads ~
Have a good weekend ~
Grace
You had me at vespers. Very nice!
ReplyDeleteSomething to aspire to, and beautifully expressed. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteLoose ends and countless sheep can be conquered...slashing paddocks is the answer...physical exhaustion...lovely pic ..birds in chevron flight...am going to steal it.
ReplyDeletefilled with hope and refreshing thoughts:) the way to start our day,,,,lovely poem
ReplyDeleteSo true. Yet sometimes those loose ends are things only we can resolve...
ReplyDeleteOh, if only the issues truly could be laid to rest. Usually they seem more like zombies and they come back the next day.
ReplyDeleteTrue, and so well stated.
ReplyDeleteThat middle couplet is a little sobering :-)
ReplyDeleteYou are an accomplished water colourist.
well done! that last stanza, and particularly "countless sheep are numbered," slowed me down and made me think. excellent!
ReplyDeleteI agree. Delighted in your steps toward comparison! This message used the form well,with room to breathe.
ReplyDeleteI love the note of practical positivism in this piece !!!
ReplyDeleteI love that word "vespers" — it always takes me back to summer camp and prayers sung at nightfall, on a hill, with the sky above and the lake below. So restful. And in those days problems didn't "reappear with the coming of the dawn"! Well said.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem.
K
Marvelous write. ~ M
ReplyDeletevery nice work. Randy
ReplyDelete"Our problems, too, traverse the night refreshed", I love that. That our problems are the same yet new, every day, not resolved only fresh.
ReplyDeleteOh, she did it again! That's my sister above...I just scrolled down here to make comment on the exact same potions!! Umm...well, I'll just say, "what she said!!"
ReplyDeleteExcellent work!
that should be portions!
DeleteGoodness! A family affair!
Deletelovely piece with nice thoughts...start a day unencumbered. Lovely close!
ReplyDeleteDon't like redundancy, but this is lovely and true.
ReplyDeleteEnjoying your previous posts and your versatility as a writer. I appreciate how your blog is organized. The styles pique my interest and your writing is so fluid! Thank you.
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