Tuesday, January 13, 2009

LXXXIII - The Fieldmouse and the Buttercup

Laura Jayne at Pictures, Poetry & Prose poses a daily writing challenge.
The prompt for this poem was “Love”.

The Fieldmouse and the Buttercup

In a meadow full of flowers
A fieldmouse came to settle,
And there he met a buttercup
And they chatted, heart to heart
(Or maybe heart to petal).

They met quite often in the field
And would sit a while together;
But while each admired the other
They talked about the weather.

And never once did either guess
What the other one was thinking;
Even when their cheeks were flushed,
They put it down to drinking.

‘Til at last the fieldmouse said:
“I think it would be true
That thought the fields are full of flowers
There are no more like you!”

Replied the buttercup to the fieldmouse:
“What lovely things you say;
You too are sort of special,
In a mousey kind of way.

Said the fieldmouse to the buttercup:
“I think my joy’s complete!”
And he blushed a pink beneath his fur
And squirmed upon his seat.

Said the buttercup to the fieldmouse:
"O you are a gallant fellow!”
And she too blushed, an orange blush!
(Because to start with she was yellow.)

Then they sat there side by side,
Neither knowing what to say,
Then turned and both said at once:
“Do you think it’s going to rain?”

So now we see them sitting
As they sat so oft before;
Still talking about the weather
But holding leaf in paw.

© J Cosmo Newbery
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  1. Absolutely adorable account of an unlikely love. :)
    My favorite line:
    "You too are sort of special,
    In a mousey kind of way."
    You continue to out-do yourself.

  2. Awwwwww... I LOVE this! I'm going to read it to Ryan when she gets home!

  3. So the offspring is a Field cup? Or a Buttermouse?

  4. wonderful again
    adjectives are running out rather quickly
    at some point i'm going to let loose with a "good job dude". i'm just warning you in advance.

    lee. ever the pragmatist.

  5. this was an absolutely charming read ..

    so, therefore, i read it twice.

  6. I'm comfortable with 'good job dude'.

    But not in public, OK?

  7. What a darling little love story.

  8. Shades of The Owl And The Pussycat....What a sweet little love story! I think Lee is rushing things. Which seems to be a particularly male problem. Let there be a bit of wooing and some courtship before we bring any buttermice into the picture....

    Do these lovely words just pop into your head every time someone shows you a beautiful picture...and.... do you give classes?

  9. You charmed us all again.

  10. That is so delightful j cosmo, I think it would have to be my favourite so far and what a sublime picture. ♥
    I loved that she blushed, an orange blush, what a beautiful imagination you have, maybe you should write a childrens' book using these characters. ♥

  11. This is so entirely precious. I adore it and would love to see it illustrated. Your imagination is brilliant and fun. Bravo... yet again!!

  12. Oh thankyou.I can't wait until my grandbabies are old enough to apprecitate this.


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